Nowadays, more and more people like to buy things by internet. They spend much time and money on this thing, and they like to communicate with their friends about online shopping.
點評:以上的英文表達沒有問題,沒有使用華麗的大詞和結構,但是句中的詞匯卻使用的是考生被用濫的詞匯,比如nowadays、more and more、buy、like等,使得句子無亮點可言。如果考生能夠應用自己耳熟能詳但卻不常使用的小詞來替換那些過于普通的小詞,那么句子更加有力度。請看下面筆者利用小詞得出的一個修改版本。
In this day and age, an increasing number of youngsters are fond of shopping online. During their spare time, they incline to spend much of time and incomes on purchasing a variety of daily necessities such as foods or clothes; meanwhile, they would communicate with their friends and share their experience on this matter.
點評:修改后的版本用了in this day and age替代修改前的nowadays,an increasing number of替換more and more,用are fond of替代like,用purchase替代buy,這些用來替代的詞便是考生熟知但是較少使用的小詞,這些詞匯的難度不高、易于掌握,并且比最常用的初級詞匯要更有表達效果。考生對比修改前后的表達,可以立即看到修改后的作文給人耳目一新的感覺。